As I emailed Annie asking her to look at my video, she replied  with some suggestions to make it better:

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Annie’s feedback was helpful because it gives a fresh pair of eyes on the video where she can see problems i may not have noticed. I had already taken out a filler shot of the girls shoes because I was told it was a bit random so this never made it into the final first edit. I am now going to focus on trying to get the video as sharp as possible as Annie seems to be happy with the narrative – it is just trying to tighten things up.